Poking his head around a corner The Mystical Old Man in startling voice "Hey"! Ahhaahhhah what are you doing?
Jacob: Scared Non Nnnnnothing just looking.
Looking for what? Asks the mystical old man Answers? Many answers. many problems. At this point the Mystical old man begins to write out a mathematical equation on the portable chalk board. Images include a monkey = £π×funny kid¥√π%of a smelly = Oh How can I help you young boy?
Jacob being hungry and excited to have a pocket full of coins, walked down the street, it seems like people are everywhere. The Street is filled with the fun spirit of Christmas. Christmas is just around the corner. Christmas Comming Soon! Christmas is coming soon. Get your paper, The Brand New Continental Train is Coming! Read all about it. Yells a young paper boy.
"A new train", says Jocob.
Jacob buys a paper that's filled with front page pictures of the new Continental train.
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Jacob keeps on walking down the busy street and finally finds a small little Deli. Jacob buys the biggest sandwich that they make and to top it off Jacob buys the biggest milk shake to go along with it. After eating until he so full he can't walk Jacob sees a hidden toy store just around the corner.
This is great, Marek. You do a much better job of fleshing out the story than I did! I can fix spelling and such. Is there a way I can edit on the screen or do I need to make a copy and edit that way? I love the songs and the pictures are wonderful. I am excited you are moving forward. I will help in whatever way I can!!!
Jacob gets to town and after looking around for food for what feels like hours he comes up empty. No Food Hungry and all Alone.
Jacob is sad. :(
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Jacob leans up against a fence outside of The Grand Hotel and takes a nap.
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Grand Hotel
WAKEUP! Yells a old man walking by Jacob while he was sleeping. Jacob looks down at his hat and realizes it's full of coins, WoW Jacob yells. Just the a nicely dressed old lady give Jacob another coin. "Make sure to get something to eat". The nice old lady says to Jacob.
Jacob wakesup in the middle of the night and starts to folds his clothes once he is done he raps them up in a sheet and ties the sheet to the end of his stick.
Off he goes
Jacob sneaks out and goes down the back stairs walking slowly across the dining room, Jacob quietly opens the door and slips out into the backyard.
Jacob reaches the opening in the fence and he is free.
Jacob makes his way through the small town of Hinterland past all of the shops that are closed past the small Pubs and people laughing and sneaks his way to a small road leading out of the Town of Hinterland.
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I really love this story, Marek, and the visuals. I look forward to more. You really write very well in the style you want, and it works!
The Magical Toy Store Mystical Old Man
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Jacob enters the The Magical Store.
Mystical Old Man
Poking his head around a corner The Mystical Old Man in startling voice "Hey"! Ahhaahhhah what are you doing?
Jacob: Scared Non Nnnnnothing just looking.
Looking for what? Asks the mystical old man Answers? Many answers. many problems. At this point the Mystical old man begins to write out a mathematical equation on the portable chalk board. Images include a monkey = £π×funny kid¥√π%of a smelly = Oh How can I help you young boy?
I can't copy and paste after all. Sorry. I will use my other computer and type it; it's not that long.
@Harriet Page The Story continues below >>>>>>>>>>>
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HUNGRY
Jacob being hungry and excited to have a pocket full of coins, walked down the street, it seems like people are everywhere. The Street is filled with the fun spirit of Christmas. Christmas is just around the corner. Christmas Comming Soon! Christmas is coming soon. Get your paper, The Brand New Continental Train is Coming! Read all about it. Yells a young paper boy.
"A new train", says Jocob.
Jacob buys a paper that's filled with front page pictures of the new Continental train.
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Jacob keeps on walking down the busy street and finally finds a small little Deli. Jacob buys the biggest sandwich that they make and to top it off Jacob buys the biggest milk shake to go along with it. After eating until he so full he can't walk Jacob sees a hidden toy store just around the corner.
The Magical Toy Store
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I will copy and edit, just for spelling.
Did my comment publish? I signed in with my email but not sure it got through!
This is great, Marek. You do a much better job of fleshing out the story than I did! I can fix spelling and such. Is there a way I can edit on the screen or do I need to make a copy and edit that way? I love the songs and the pictures are wonderful. I am excited you are moving forward. I will help in whatever way I can!!!
Hungry:
Jacob realizes hes really hungry.
"Boy I'm Hungry" says Jacob to himself.
Jacob brushes himself off and heads back to town.
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Jacob gets to town and after looking around for food for what feels like hours he comes up empty. No Food Hungry and all Alone.
Jacob is sad. :(
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Jacob leans up against a fence outside of The Grand Hotel and takes a nap.
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Grand Hotel
WAKEUP! Yells a old man walking by Jacob while he was sleeping. Jacob looks down at his hat and realizes it's full of coins, WoW Jacob yells. Just the a nicely dressed old lady give Jacob another coin. "Make sure to get something to eat". The nice old lady says to Jacob.
Hungry
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The Old Shed:
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Jacob while walking down a path out of town finds an old Shed, Jacob sneaks his way into the old Shed and lays down for the night.
Morning Springs:
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Jacob wakes up to a weird sound, CHOMP CHOMP CHOMP and a terrible smell. YUCK! Yells Jacob!
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Looking up
Jacob sees a Cow eating hay. The Cow is hoving over Jacob through the window of the Shed.
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Jacob quickly hides his clothes under a pile of Hay.
Sings
Out of the town of Hinterland
Out of the town I go
Out of the town of Hinterland
Out of the town I go
Where I'm going no body will know
I'll play in the hay on a summer's day
In the winter I'll play in the snow
Jacob's Treasure
Jacob wakesup in the middle of the night and starts to folds his clothes once he is done he raps them up in a sheet and ties the sheet to the end of his stick.
Off he goes
Jacob sneaks out and goes down the back stairs walking slowly across the dining room, Jacob quietly opens the door and slips out into the backyard.
Jacob reaches the opening in the fence and he is free.
Jacob makes his way through the small town of Hinterland past all of the shops that are closed past the small Pubs and people laughing and sneaks his way to a small road leading out of the Town of Hinterland.
Jacob's Treasure
Jacob a young boy lives at an Orphanage in the small village town of Hinterland located in The Carpathian Mountains.
Jacob feeling trapped and unloved decides to escape the Orphanage
Jacob noticed a broken part of the fence in the field outside of the back area of the Orphanage.
So Jacob plans his escape.
Jacob finds a stick he hides the stick under the mattress of his bed.
Very touching ending. Well done ****